What exactly is wrong about this story from my childhood?
- This topic has 232 replies, 13 voices, and was last updated 5 years, 10 months ago by
.
-
Posts
-
The dialogue sounds incredibly fake. I’ve raised both a boy and a girl and have been around lots of kids when they were that age. That’s now how they talk. My daughter was that age at that time.
So the first thing that is wrong with your story is that is sounds totally fake.
The second thing that is wrong with your story is that you hit someone in the face with a baseball and didn’t get into trouble. I don’t know of a school that would ignore what you did. Both you and the bully would have been disciplined. Your parents would have been called in for a meeting.
Third, where were the playground monitors?
Fourth, you seem to think the important thing about the girl was that she was pretty. Not that she was someone needing help. Since when did a girl of that age call a boy a hero? They don’t.
Your story sounds fake, fake, fake. No wonder people don’t like it. They are left wondering why you go around telling a fake story trying to impress people. Get a real life.
You give it away that it’s a story. You titled it a story. If it had actually happened you would have a different title.
Why don’t people believe me
When I tell about this thing that happened on the playground no one likes it
I stood up to a bully and no one believes meAh, the nostalgia for the chivalric days of nights in shining armor. The crusades were fought by knights in shining armor, who were stirred up by the Pope and their desire to do some fighting, and traveled all the way across Europe to ‘liberate’ Jerusalem from its Muslim rulers. On that long trek they raped many women, murdered men, women, and children — especially Jews, but also fellow Christians. When they captured Jerusalem, it was wanton slaughter: Muslims, Christians, Jews — anything that moved. A historian of the time reported a street ankle-deep in blood. Chivalry was a fraud, a made-up tale. Girls and women also had zero rights back then.
And yes, this is one of those made-up tales of how good things were back in the traditional gender-role days of the 1950s. It’s meant to teach us how much feminism has cost all of us. Happily society has evolved for the better to the extent that this morality tale seems awfully shop-worn. I know, that last sentence seems strange in the Age of Trump, but he too shall pass and our culture has improved so much since the 1950s, with progress that Trump won’t be able to reverse.
Hunter, honey, this was the wrong forum to ask about this. I feel like there must be Gen Z Storytime forums out there somewhere…
Who brags about some “good” deed they did at 8? Why are you even telling people this story? Generally people of actual good moral character don’t go around promoting all of the “good” deeds they’ve done.
Why not do something good now? That’s more impressive than touting your playground violence.
You understand why this story is less well received now, you laid out all the objections people have to it in your original post.
What is the point of this post now? Do you want validation that no no no what a sweet boy you were? Are you trying to bait people so you can make some point about the world being too PC now?
Honestly, wtf is the point of this post?
OK, first of all, this is a TRUE STORY. I’m sorry if it sounds exaggerated (it kinda is) but it is a true event that happened in my life. I haven’t told it in forever. The reason it came up now is that last week at school we were asked to write about a time we had helped someone being bullied. When I read it to the class, people said things like “you should’ve let her take care of herself”, and “that was kind of patronizing to her, and mean to him. As for the whole smacking his face thing I didn’t break his nose or anything, just made a little red sting mark on his face, he was fine. The whole pretty girl/knight in shining armor thing was just me copying my older brother/fairy tales. She wasn’t really fawning over me like I said she was. She basically just said thanks and was happy to see him get his ass kicked. We were only joking around with the whole “knight in shining armor” thing, but it was definitely an ego boost for me. Maybe I should’ve posted this in the OP IDK.
Letter writer, you come across as wanting to start keyboard word-slinging over bullshit. I am also intrigued with what you get out of it.
Also, I’m from Hawaii, so there’s some Pidgin English in the dialogue which is probably why you guys say it sounds fake. Pidgin is a creole language spoken in Hawaii made up of words from various languages (mostly English) as well as a few words of it’s own. Look it up if you wanna know more. Also, the playground monitors were always too busy watching the ball games on the field, so the playground is basically the wild wild west.
It sounds fake because it’s made up. So is being asked to write about a time you stood up for someone being bullied, in what, the 12th grade?
