What exactly is wrong about this story from my childhood?
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January 20, 2019 at 2:43 pm #816475
The thing about homeroom is that there is no subject. It isn’t a class. It is just the first room of the day and it is used for announcements and figuring out who isn’t in school that day and giving out a handout if there is one. Then the bell rings again and the kids move on to the first class of the day.
KateJanuary 20, 2019 at 2:43 pm #816476All right, well, you told a bunch of people and got a poor reaction, so don’t keep telling it. You got feedback on why it’s not well received. And you can stand up against bullying in constructive ways that are relevant to 11th grade, if that’s important to you.
KateJanuary 20, 2019 at 2:47 pm #816477Right, Skyblossom, I had homeroom. It would have made zero sense to be writing an essay in there. It was 10 minutes at 7am and it was for taking attendance.
Even if it’s true that some public schools don’t trust 16-y/o kids to sit there and check over their homework, it doesn’t change my belief that this is as fake as any “and then the whole bus clapped and Obama gave me a medal” story on social media.
January 20, 2019 at 2:50 pm #816478Most fiction writers base at least some of their characters on real people but change them some and part of their stories will have some kernels of real events that are then added to for the story.
When you start embellishing you go from nonfiction to fiction. Just because it was somewhat based on a true event doesn’t mean that the final work wasn’t fiction. It was. It was too exaggerated and so the story sounded fake but as if you expected them to believe it was real. When you are assigned to write something that happened don’t turn it into a piece of fiction.
This is kind of an odd question. Why is it surprising that 16- and 17-year-olds would view a situation differently than 8-year-olds? Why don’t you just listen to what they told you instead of asking us why they gave the feedback that they did?
I actually did defend classmates who were getting picked on when I was in fifth grade. No one cheered for me. The bullies generally just walked away. One threatened to punch me and held his fist over my head. Everyone else just stared at me. This is part of why I think your story is fake. The dialogue is very strange too. What 8-year-olds talk like that?
I think you’re trying to get people to state some opinions that you’re going to say are “too PC” and are trying to rile people up. I’d say that generally, it’s best to not spend this much time dwelling on something you did in third grade. Just let it go.
HunterJanuary 20, 2019 at 3:24 pm #816482I consider my childhood to have ended when I started middle school in 7th grade (2014-2015). I am sick and tired of you guys saying I’m fake and obsessed and what not. It’s not like I’ve been telling this story every day for the past 8 years, it just came up one day last week, and people basically called me the real bully instead of the punk kid, and I wanted to know why they’d think that that’s all. If you all really want me to put it to rest I will but don’t you go telling me life is “lies lies lies”.
Ele4phantJanuary 20, 2019 at 3:43 pm #816486I don’t even care if you’re lying or not. I don’t care if this is 100% true or some is true and you’ve added some embellishes of your own to make a point about chivalry/pump yourself as the good guy – your initial question was why people had issues with the story – but you’ve been told and already know.
Sorry it’s not getting the reaction you want – online or in person, that is what it is. You can’t argue people into changing their perceptions of how they read this story. Stop telling this story if you don’t like how people respond.
RebeccaJanuary 20, 2019 at 4:02 pm #816488If there was any consistency at all to what you wrote. If it didn’t sound like a thousand other internet stories out there. If you hadn’t admittedly “exaggerated” more than a bit. If your word choice sounded more like a 16 year old, and I know it doesn’t because I teach people 18+, and THEY don’t sound as old as you. If part of that last bit wasn’t using phrases like “from my childhood” and “an old toy from this era” which both make you sound at least 30.
Then we wouldn’t be calling your “story” fake.
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